An Avenger who needs more fleshing out [Archive] - Wizards Community

An Avenger who needs more fleshing out [Archive] - Wizards Community

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Archangel62
12-22-05, 03:27 AM I got a look at the Dalkyr Half blood race and decided to use it for a character concept I've been turning over in my head for a while. The idea is fairly simple, his family was murdered when he was young, the apartment complex that they lived in (for period think rennaisance-esq) because the owner was unable to pay protection money to the local criminal lords. His parents got him outside, he was human at this time, but the escape from the burning building almost killed him, he was severely injured and almost dead.

He fell to the ground and would have died if not for a bit of fortune, he was found by a silthiar (Lords of Madness) who realized what had happened and brought the boy to his lab where he was rebuilt. The process involved the use of symbiotes and grafts in order to let this new body survive. When the boy woke up he was terrified by his new form but also felt something new, he wanted vengeance, wanted to destroy the people who had destroyed his life.

The silthiar made him a deal, he would teach this young man the ways of the warrior as well as to help make him stronger and better, but in exchange the boy would have to swear to fight for justice, for good, not just for simple vengeance. After the boy agreed he was trained, slowly being led to the path of the ghostwalker. He found the bully basher gauntlets and uses them pretty well, my only real problem with him is that I'm trying to find more to motivate him and am having trouble, I want some help to flesh out his personality and would appreciate any advice.
Pan_Ai_Khan
12-22-05, 08:46 AM You need to define just what the character is fighting for/against.
You need to decide if the character is content with the justice system as it stands, or needs to work outside of it.

Good personality stereotypes for Avenging / Justice characters:

1) Superman (Lawful outlook, supported and endorced by the System, protects the innocent, always captures alive)
2) Batman (Neutral outlook, works along-side the System, captures alive if possible)
3) Punisher (Chaotic outlook, works completely outside of the System, is often Judge, Jury and Executioner)
Morka
12-22-05, 03:57 PM Perhaps is he Lawful Neutral? He honestly tryes to help people because it is what he was taught to do, but because of his past (and because he is now only part human), he is unable to spontaneously do a good deed.

Also, what does he look like? Does he look like an human, or something completely gruesome? What would be the reaction of Mrs Smith whom cat is on the top of a tree if this creature happen and tell her it'll take care of the cat?

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Archangel62 12-22-05, 03:27 AM	I got a look at the Dalkyr Half blood race and decided to use it for a character concept I've been turning over in my head for a while. The idea is fairly simple, his family was murdered when he was young, the apartment complex that they lived in (for period think rennaisance-esq) because the owner was unable to pay protection money to the local criminal lords. His parents got him outside, he was human at this time, but the escape from the burning building almost killed him, he was severely injured and almost dead. He fell to the ground and would have died if not for a bit of fortune, he was found by a silthiar (Lords of Madness) who realized what had happened and brought the boy to his lab where he was rebuilt. The process involved the use of symbiotes and grafts in order to let this new body survive. When the boy woke up he was terrified by his new form but also felt something new, he wanted vengeance, wanted to destroy the people who had destroyed his life. The silthiar made him a deal, he would teach this young man the ways of the warrior as well as to help make him stronger and better, but in exchange the boy would have to swear to fight for justice, for good, not just for simple vengeance. After the boy agreed he was trained, slowly being led to the path of the ghostwalker. He found the bully basher gauntlets and uses them pretty well, my only real problem with him is that I'm trying to find more to motivate him and am having trouble, I want some help to flesh out his personality and would appreciate any advice.
Pan_Ai_Khan 12-22-05, 08:46 AM	You need to define just what the character is fighting for/against. You need to decide if the character is content with the justice system as it stands, or needs to work outside of it. Good personality stereotypes for Avenging / Justice characters: 1) Superman (Lawful outlook, supported and endorced by the System, protects the innocent, always captures alive) 2) Batman (Neutral outlook, works along-side the System, captures alive if possible) 3) Punisher (Chaotic outlook, works completely outside of the System, is often Judge, Jury and Executioner)
Morka 12-22-05, 03:57 PM	Perhaps is he Lawful Neutral? He honestly tryes to help people because it is what he was taught to do, but because of his past (and because he is now only part human), he is unable to spontaneously do a good deed. Also, what does he look like? Does he look like an human, or something completely gruesome? What would be the reaction of Mrs Smith whom cat is on the top of a tree if this creature happen and tell her it'll take care of the cat?