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darksamuari 03-06-04, 03:41 PM	I wanted to know if this was a good history and traits for my character. He is 3rd level (2fighter/1 rogue). Appearance, Traits + Disadvantages Qierdan is of average human weight and height. He is 32 years old and doesn't look a hair past it. He is strong but does not show it off. His traits consist of being cheap and cowardly. He is easily scarred and because of this hates practical jokes. He has a phobia of rats and snakes, the sight of one will make him scream and pass out. Qierdan hates the sea for engulfing his father and despises anything related to it. History Qierdan was born on the coast of Candlekeep was raised by the Sea. His father was a fishermen and his mother a housewife. Qierdan's father would take him with on his trips out to sea. Teach him how to catch fish and crabs and tell him stories of his heritage. One day while in out in the water his father was showing him how to sail their boat when his father sensed a storm was coming. He tried to sail back to land but the storm has reached the pathetic boat. Qierdan watched as the boat was smashed with waves and his father was thrown out into the depth of the mighty sea. Qierdan only made it back to shore from what his father has taught him that day. Qierdan and his mother left Candlekeep because of the memories and Qierdan's nightmares. They settled in Beregost. Qierdan had to pick up a job as a slave to keep him and his mother from starving. One day out in the market, he came across a booth of gem necklaces. He had the earge to take one and present it to his mother for her birthday. he distracted the owner and snagged it. He went home and his mother has terrified of what he had done. She was so ashamed he left his house and went his own way. Qierdan hiked a long while till he fond a destination where he could take on a new life, this place was Scornubel. He made his way of living from pickpoketing and doing assorted jobs here and there. One day a fleet of soldiers came into the city and Qierdan saw the opportunity he had been looking for. He pickpoketed a few of the soldiers with ease and everything was going good. The next day he did a little more thievery until he was caught be surprise by a commander. He realized what he had down and ran. A chase incurred and followed until Qierdan walked into a dead end and was forced to fight. He fought his best but the cammander got the better of him. The commander surprised of his attitude presented him with a deal, join the army of Elturel or be sent to prison. Qierdan chose the army and fought for 4 years. He then quit and went on with what he new looking for adventure. Post what you think or if i should fix or add anything.
Erih, Shadowdweller 03-06-04, 04:29 PM	There's a dozen spelling errors, but I'm sure you'll get to them. :). Then, there's the Snako-phobia. Might be a bit too much that he passes out. Virtually any adventure consists of at least one oversized rat/snake. I like the story, though a bit of more detail on why he left his mother would be nice (I do understand it, it's just a bit messy). -Erih
psuedopod 03-06-04, 05:11 PM	Looks decent overall, but you might want to rephrase the sentence stating that he "took a job as a slave". He could sell himself into slavery, maybe, but that's not really a job. You can't quit, for one thing.