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V1zharan 01-13-07, 06:58 PM	One body runs to escape and to find. Mutiny forms and bears two steadfast fists Born of common blood. Ever is blood denied The satisfaction of triumph. Only through coalescence Can freedoms end be hindered. Alone is the blade that holds the aptitude To merge these fists and arrest the hand That may hold the life of the cosmos Within it’s grasp. I will explain each line as it has to do with my campaign, a warning, this may take a bit of reading. One body runs to escape and to find -a family of 4(parents and 2 3 year old sons) is going to a new country with a few other families because the one they are leaving is at war, so they are escaping war and finding peace Mutiny forms and bears two fists -a couple members of the group for a yet unknown reason kills the parents, they take one of the kids while the rest of the group takes the other, and the group splits, hence the mutiny the children grow up separate, only vaguely knowing they have a brother, one turns out evil, the other turns out good, they both form organizations dedicated the their alignments, and both are powerful, which would be the two fists Born of common blood -pretty simply, the two "fists" are from the same parents, so hence are of the same blood Ever is blood denied -blood being the brothers The satisfaction of triumph -triumph being denied means the two groups are unable to defeat eachother Only through coalescence -only by teaming up Can freedoms end be hindered -a cult/organization wants to take over the world and is going to be bringing their deity, which was imprisoned by the other deities for being evil and too powerful, onto that plane, the organization with the help of their deity will control the world, hence ending freedom, and so only by the brothers teaming up can the world be saved Alone is the blade that holds the aptitude -the lone blade is the PC's To merge these fists and arrest the hand -merging the fists means bringing the brothers and their organizations together the hand they need to arrest is the world-domination-bent organization That may hold the life of the cosmos -cosmos=world Within it's grasp -meaning the world-bent-organization would control the world if they aren't stopped by the brothers teaming up Let me know what you think. ~V1zharan~ EDIT:centralization became coalescence, and Ever is blood denied The satisfaction of separation and triumph got changed to Ever is blood denied The satisfaction of triumph due to it fitting with the story better if the brothers dont know they are related
Toloran 01-13-07, 07:24 PM	Centralization is too bulky of a word and is kind of a speed bump while reading it. Other then that, it seems good.