bear with me, I am trying to upload two new monsters, and am having a hard time with it. I hope you can see these.... I am not very computer savvy. These are flavored Gith for the remake of Raiders of the Chanth that I am doing and plan to post for you all. Any help in how to post anything, and do assume that i am a computer idiot.
Here goes.....oh any feedback on the actual monsters would be awesome.
I posted these by printing them from Monster builder, scanning them, uploading them to my profile, and posting them here. I hope they end up legible....
Some comments on the psyker:
Mental Marrionete: the sustain standard is a little weird. It's weird that a sustain only allows them to repeat the attack, rather than just maintain the domination.
Psychic Shriek: Why the limit on amount of hit points recovered per round? This would only be an issue if there was more than one Psyker. Typically, though, you don't use more than one leader in an encounter. I see it as a non issue.
Thought Projection: I don't see the need for this power. A dm can just say that the psyker communicates something telepathically to its allies. This is completely roleplaying power, and I don't know if it is required in the stat block. Maybe in the Psyker's write-up you can say that it often communicates telepathically with its allies. Or, add Telepathy 5 in it's language section. In fact, the power you wrote up is identical to Telepathy 5. Simpler is better. Go with Telepathy.
Clean up the Free action "new power".
I like mental bastion.
I don't really think you even need the 'Conjure Soulblade' power. Their throw power is a Recharge power, which is already flavored as needing to have some time before uses. It's already built with the sense that the Gith has to regenerate the power, ie, conjure a new blade.
Also, if the 'Conjure Soulblade' is a free action, there really isn't any limit on expending it. Effectively cancelling out the need to put "this expends the soulblade" on each soulblade power. I would get rid of 'Conjure Soulblade' and remove the "soulblade is expended" from the powers.
The Psychic Blade is a little uninspired. This is their quintessential power. Add some psychic damage. You have it labeled with the psychic tag, but it is unclear that it actually does psychic damage. The new standard is to make it explicit what type of damage it does. If it doesn't indicate a type, it does normal damage by default. Like, (1d10+6 damage plus 5 psychic damage and the target is marked until the end of the gith soulknife's next turn.)
Rollawaythestone: Thanks for the feedback.
Mental Marrionette came from the DSCC psionic adept theme, I agree with you. It is confusing... perhaps simply making it sustain standard to continue the domination is a good idea.
Psychic Shreik was adapted from the Witherling Death Shrieker, p 212 MM2. I basically used the power as written, but I think you are right.
Thought Projection, I didn't know I could add telepathy 5 to languages, so I will go back to do that.
I knew I needed to clean up the free action section on the psyker, I will get on that, easy fix.
Well, I will edit these and see how I can get them posted better for you all.
Hmmm, while they are prettier, they are also smaller..... I still need to make the images larger for you to see. These are now PNT files from a PDF writer. How can I make them bigger?
If you go to your public gallery and view one of your images you can see that right below the image is a link to "View full-size image". Click on this, and use the url from this image view to imbed the image into your post.
I'm glad you like my feedback. I love the Gith, and these are two cool monsters.
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Hopefully better image for Gith Soulknife
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Hey, if i get better at this, the sooner we all get the new adventure, or the rewritten adventure anyhow.
well, edited 9/17/10 here are the new versions that everyone asked talked about, using the techniques i have mastered so far. NOW if I could only get them side by darn side. Thanks for all the feedback so far.
Create a screen cap of each stat block, and save each individually in Profile/Photos. Edit your first post on this thread and go to Insert/Edit Image. On another new page load Profile/Photos, and right click on the photo and choose Copy Link, then paste it into Insert/Edit Image on the first page, then click OK. Then press Enter twice to give you two lines of space and do it all a second time for the second image. Before you accept the changes to the post, preview it to make changes if need be. The result is a normal sized image, no skewing, one above the other, with no need to click on it to make it bigger.
Also, how the hell did you get that incredibly big first images you posted? :D I couldn't find a way to get them so big myself!
About the monsters, I think the psycher is quite right, while the soulknife is rather weak as a defender, because it can punish its mark only one time per encounter! It should be at-will or at least Recharge 4 5 6.
Also, compare the damages of your monsters with the ones of creatures of the same level in Monster Manual 3 or Dark Sun Creature Catalog. The new standard is higher than the one of Monster Manual 1 and 2, and the Monster Builder probably still uses the old standard... So maybe you should bump the damage a bit. Don't know, I haven't checked myself... (lazy! :P )
The Soulknife does seem underpowered, i will have to make augment the mark a recharge power 4,5,6 to keep the damage output higher.
I will look at comparable monster damages as you suggested n change them as necessary.
The bitch of it all is, I realize that I need a Gith Skirmisher too that is not a minion to take advantage of an encounter, not the soldier, but i will make use of the soldier....... So look for that soon too. Really, trying to follow Randy Maxwell's "Raiders of the Chanth" and rework it to 4E is kinda a bitch.... it would be sooooo much easier just to plunk in appropriate monsters to the level, but sigh, that is how we ended up with Maruaders of the Dune Sea.
I have NO IDEA how to do a screen cap. I messaged you about it, but you didn't respond which i can understand. As the screen cap was the 1st piece of the process in your advice, you can understand how i couldn't implement it. I reread it a few times to see if i could figure it out.
I do thank you for the advice, now ANYONE, how do I do go about creating a screen cap so i can post monsters and get feedback on the monster and not the method of how I post? I appreciate both by the way.
This is very helpful if you want to capture anything else than a Monster Builder entry, albeit it works even for that. I use it with Word, as all my monster stat blocks do not use Monster Builder (it's way cleaner that way and easily editable, as Monster Builder makes a lot of mistakes).
We are Gith!: Haha, but unless you want gith to be like kobolds and goblins - often the comic relief amongst 4e monsters - choose a serious name ;)
Mental Marionette: New name too, as gith are not known for masterminds. Maybe...Urge of the Horde? The fluff can say they impart on their enemies the impulses of a gith, or something.
Soulknife
I wouldn't call it a soulknife, too 3e...but that's me.
Psychic Blade: So is it 2d6 +4 damage plus 5 psychic damage, or ... ?
Shield Push: The terminology is also skewed. Is this an artifact from Monster Builder? Should say "1d10 + 3 damage, and the target ..."
Throw the Blade: Psychic Throw would be better, and works in tandem with Psychic Blade, as far as names go.
Augment the Mark: Would be better as Augmented Mark or Augment Mark. The 2d6 extra psychic damage is odd. I do not believe such a power exists as written. If need be just add the damages together, something like 4d6.
Pysker yeah, I am a snarky bastard, We Are Gith needs a new name. Mental Marionette comes from Monster Themes at the Back of DSCC, but I can easily rename it. Gith in 2E were VERY psioinic, it just kinda reflects that, but i can haul him more back to 4E. I love the Gith as foes, but I adore Goblin and Kobold humor just the same.
Soulknife any suggestions for a new name? "Gith Psychic Warrior/Trooper" again, very 3e.
Psychic blade: gonna halfta look at that again
Shield Push: no I made that up, using Tide of Iron as a basis (which I adored for my guardian fighter) so I will clean up the language.
Throw the Blade: yeah, Psychic throw makes more sense.
Augment the mark: is again based off something from the Monster Themes in DSCC, I just didn't think thru how to add the extra damage, but I will fix it.
Well everyone, thanks for so much constructive criticism on my first two new monsters for 4E, looks like just some fluff and renaming and clarifying and these two suckas, and they are in the pike.