Forsaken Race Needing Reviewed

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#1

Novama

Mar 12, 2015 7:25:43

This was a request from a player that will be joining my table. I used the drow subrace to try and balance his character concept. Statistically, will this character have any obvious balancing issues?

Flavor wise, does this race seem like a potentially enjoyable one to play as?

 

Race: Forsaken

 

Primary Statistic: INT (Plus 2 INT)

 

 

Secondary Statistic STR or DEX (Plus 1 to which ever chosen)

 

 

Appearance:

 

Height: 7 ft to 7 1/2 ft (Medium)

 

Skin Color: Ashen Black

 

Wears cloaks that cover up their entire body

 

Eye Color: Red

 

 

Vision: Darkvision

 

 

Alignment: Chaotic Good

 

 

Linguistics:

 

    Common

    Abyssal

 

Starting age of Adulthood:

 

    9000 years

 

Features:

 

    Forsaken Weapon Proficiency:

       Staffs

         Greatswords

       Longbow

 

    Dark Soul: Gives an advantage to saving rolls against being charmed.

 

    

Skills:

    Perception Proficiency

 

Abilities:

 

   (flavor text blade ward) Ghost Appearance- 1action, instant, cantrip, Somantic/verbal In battles this feature makes them ghost-like until the end of their next turn (resistance to slashing, piercing, bludgeoning attacks) (Level 1 )


 (flavor text charm person)   Karosh’gor- 1 action, 30 feet, v/s, 1 hour- The Forsaken looks at an opponent and raises their weapon giving a little chant. target must make a Wis save roll (with advantage if currently fighting target). on a fail, it is charmed by caster until the spell ends or until the castor or the castor's companions harm it. feature can only be used once between long rests (Level 3 )

 

    Voroglok- The Forsaken takes off the robes covering their body to expose their off worldly appearance and as that happens the Forsaken starts a little chant and then their appearance changes a little to match their secondary statistic’s main aspect (dex makes them appear more elven. Str makes them appear more brawny). Their total damage dealt per attack as a result of any non-intelligence based attack rolls gets a bonus to the damage equivalent to the INT mod. Lasts one minute. Usable once between long rests (Level 5 Concentration) Ex: int mod +3, str mod +3. Jack scores normal hit with long sword. Jack does 1d8+3(str mod) +3(int mod).

 

A bit of lore provided by the creator:


Lore: During a power change crisis in the nether a group of Forsaken that survived a dark lord’s rule managed to escape into the worlds where light shines brightest. The other races in these worlds did not welcome them with the most hearty of welcomes. The Forsaken learned quick to defend themselves and hide their true identities.

#2

Mephi1234

Mar 13, 2015 6:11:05

Okay, lets start off by saying that the alignment section on the race is there to explain a bit of the cultural mindset.   Elves believe strongly in self-expression and have protective instincts towards freedom of all races.    Thus, chaotic good.     Tieflings are independant and self-sufficent, since they often learn not to trust others.  Thus, chaotic.  

 

Simply saying "Chaotic Good" tells us nothing about the culture or mindset of the typical Forsaken.   Players aren't bound by alignment, so the important thing is to have a bit of understanding of the background of the race.  Why are they even good, when they're escaped servants?  Wouldn't the average Forsaken turn into a petty Dark Lord themselves?  Especially after 9000 years being raised on evil?  Seems to me that this is actually just a variant tiefling, with a random free skill (why perception?  doesn't make sense for the background or feel of the character) and weapons tacked on, and an affinity for the Eldritch Knight instead of Warlock and Wizard, plus different background.  

 

The problem is that we are inconsistant here.   They're hiding themselves, supposedly, but there's no real mechanics for it.  If anything, their affinity magic should have some kind of Disguise Self or Alter Self power.    You imply that all of them have been forced to adopt disguises, but there's nothing to suggest they actually have proficency with disguises, meaning that they'd still be standing otu like a sore thumb.   

 

Voroglok is flat out too strong - its equivalent to an Elemental Weapon spell, which is a level 3 instead of level 2 magic that races are consistant with.   

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Novama

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Noctaem

Mar 13, 2015 7:56:44

So the Voroglok feature only lasts 1 minute and is only usable once per day?

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Novama

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