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#1
elrodian
May 21, 2008 18:50:09 So i am starting a story with 3 Dragonmark hairs and a Psiforged. The 3 Dragonmark hairs are spellcaster, intrested in history and magic, they all when to the Twelve to study magic and they all want to become a member of the Twelve. (The Pisforged was saved by the d'Cannith and so the Psiforged help him.)

They are sent to the Silver forest my Queen Aurala ir'Wynarn to go look at ruins found in the Forest. They are sent becaues the Thranes gave them the rights ot the ruins becaues it is a palace of a magelord,a female elf, that ruled Thaliost . (they also gave it up becaues they could not get past the traps to get in.) At this time Queen Diani ir'Wynarn proclaims northern Thrane as it's own state. The lord looking over the ruins, take the party to Silvercliff castle. When they get there the Queen wants them to help her get a powerful object that the Magelord had but it is not in her palace. Queen Aurala ir'Wynarn gives them the O.K. hopeing that it would help her get some power and if Queen Diani get her power then she might give Thaliost back to her as a "Thank you"

Now i have two question: i want to know if it Queen Diain ir'Wynarn could be a part of The Aurum. My reason behide this is that she does not lead the nations and has nothing to do, she has the money and want to get back her familys power.

The Second question is can a member of the Aurum bring in poeple. I ask this becaues i want to get at lest one of the party members in it, at lest the low levels. This can help them get in To the Tewlve and can help in other stories.

but what do you guys think.

(Thank you Mephit James and Hideous Phidias for ideas that)
#2
rageofthemodrons101
May 21, 2008 19:44:28 cool. try to make an outline to organize the thoughts and vivid character backgrounds.
#3
elrodian
May 22, 2008 15:23:21 i did do the PCs backgrounds there are in a link in my Signature (but not the Psiforged)
#4
elrodian
May 24, 2008 7:39:46 Ok So i really need help finding out what the artfact that Diani want does. I have what it looks like. A Khyber dragonshard in the center, surrounded by a silver Sphere with Circle and lines ingraved all it over but the top and bottom has circles of runes and then a large rune in the middle of the Circles of runes. The last thing is a ring of white light around it. Now i do not know what it can do. I do not want to make it to over power becaues the group would not want to help becaues they patron is The Queen of Aundair. Can any one help.
#5
Edymnion
May 24, 2008 20:01:53
So i am starting a story with 3 Dragonmark hairs

Lol, so, are those three hairs attached to the same person's head, or are they just wandering around on their own?

Heh, I think you meant "heirs". ;)
#6
elrodian
May 24, 2008 20:14:19 lol yes that is right Edymnion but back to the question. Do you guys have ideas
#7
snarky_monkey
May 25, 2008 21:36:37 Hmm, you could actually make the object be something that would not concern Aundair in the slightest. Say it creates a field of some sort that can cover an extremely large area, say like a castle or small town. The field could basically protect and even prevent entry of the undead into that area. It could be a remnant of the great war, designed to alleviate the threat that Karrnath posed to Thrane, but is now relatively useless since there is a current peace.
#8
elrodian
May 26, 2008 11:18:27 i could add to that it also stops divien spells.
#9
vegetalss4
May 26, 2008 14:41:30 Snarkey monkey i am pretty sure aunduir would want that (there might not be war now, but there can be a new one anytime). but if you change it to affecting demons and/or lycanthropes then it would be very good.

oh and i think at it would be cool if Queen Diain ir'Wynarn where part of the Aurum
#10
elrodian
May 26, 2008 14:50:14 the demon think is ok but she wants the artifact to help her in the civil war she just started with Flamekeep and the Keeper of the Flame

and thanks vegetalss4

Post/Author/DateTime	Post
#1 elrodian May 21, 2008 18:50:09	So i am starting a story with 3 Dragonmark hairs and a Psiforged. The 3 Dragonmark hairs are spellcaster, intrested in history and magic, they all when to the Twelve to study magic and they all want to become a member of the Twelve. (The Pisforged was saved by the d'Cannith and so the Psiforged help him.) They are sent to the Silver forest my Queen Aurala ir'Wynarn to go look at ruins found in the Forest. They are sent becaues the Thranes gave them the rights ot the ruins becaues it is a palace of a magelord,a female elf, that ruled Thaliost . (they also gave it up becaues they could not get past the traps to get in.) At this time Queen Diani ir'Wynarn proclaims northern Thrane as it's own state. The lord looking over the ruins, take the party to Silvercliff castle. When they get there the Queen wants them to help her get a powerful object that the Magelord had but it is not in her palace. Queen Aurala ir'Wynarn gives them the O.K. hopeing that it would help her get some power and if Queen Diani get her power then she might give Thaliost back to her as a "Thank you" Now i have two question: i want to know if it Queen Diain ir'Wynarn could be a part of The Aurum. My reason behide this is that she does not lead the nations and has nothing to do, she has the money and want to get back her familys power. The Second question is can a member of the Aurum bring in poeple. I ask this becaues i want to get at lest one of the party members in it, at lest the low levels. This can help them get in To the Tewlve and can help in other stories. but what do you guys think. (Thank you Mephit James and Hideous Phidias for ideas that)
#2 rageofthemodrons101 May 21, 2008 19:44:28	cool. try to make an outline to organize the thoughts and vivid character backgrounds.
#3 elrodian May 22, 2008 15:23:21	i did do the PCs backgrounds there are in a link in my Signature (but not the Psiforged)
#4 elrodian May 24, 2008 7:39:46	Ok So i really need help finding out what the artfact that Diani want does. I have what it looks like. A Khyber dragonshard in the center, surrounded by a silver Sphere with Circle and lines ingraved all it over but the top and bottom has circles of runes and then a large rune in the middle of the Circles of runes. The last thing is a ring of white light around it. Now i do not know what it can do. I do not want to make it to over power becaues the group would not want to help becaues they patron is The Queen of Aundair. Can any one help.
#5 Edymnion May 24, 2008 20:01:53	So i am starting a story with 3 Dragonmark hairs Lol, so, are those three hairs attached to the same person's head, or are they just wandering around on their own? Heh, I think you meant "heirs". ;)
#6 elrodian May 24, 2008 20:14:19	lol yes that is right Edymnion but back to the question. Do you guys have ideas
#7 snarky_monkey May 25, 2008 21:36:37	Hmm, you could actually make the object be something that would not concern Aundair in the slightest. Say it creates a field of some sort that can cover an extremely large area, say like a castle or small town. The field could basically protect and even prevent entry of the undead into that area. It could be a remnant of the great war, designed to alleviate the threat that Karrnath posed to Thrane, but is now relatively useless since there is a current peace.
#8 elrodian May 26, 2008 11:18:27	i could add to that it also stops divien spells.
#9 vegetalss4 May 26, 2008 14:41:30	Snarkey monkey i am pretty sure aunduir would want that (there might not be war now, but there can be a new one anytime). but if you change it to affecting demons and/or lycanthropes then it would be very good. oh and i think at it would be cool if Queen Diain ir'Wynarn where part of the Aurum
#10 elrodian May 26, 2008 14:50:14	the demon think is ok but she wants the artifact to help her in the civil war she just started with Flamekeep and the Keeper of the Flame and thanks vegetalss4