help with my topaz dragon P.E.A.C.H.

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#1

dejexa13

May 16, 2010 20:46:26
Ok so I made a topaz dragon and I want to see what you guys think of it. I know there are some problems but well I'm not good at making monsters. the idea of shards spiting off the dragon is from a rpg.net  form thread.   my main concerns are warped presence and brake off.


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#2

bikermattus

May 17, 2010 13:44:09

First, apply punctuation (it's more important than it sounds).

Second, BREAK Off should produce fewer swarms of lower power.  Reducing the total number of swarms by one or two, and lowering the level by one or two (say, 3 total swarms of level 2, or 2 of level 3) would balance this nicely.

Finally, on Warped Presence, Dazed is slightly more powerful than Slowed and Weakened together.  To correct this, make it "Either Dazed or both Slowed and Weakened."  The rest seems fairly balanced to me.