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Cade Masters: Half-elf Paladin/Bard (and multiclass Rogue). Cade is blessed by Idamra, goddess of luck. Cade is a dilettante who often places style over substance. He is (at best) an above-average swordsman, a dabbler in arcane and divine magic, and is trained in the basics of an impressive variety of skills. The only two things Cade is truly good at are showmanship and being a lucky sonofabitch. Through a combination of his own dramatic story-telling and the gossip of the people, he has developed an (undeserved) reputation as a master swordsman, a miracle-working healer, a brilliant sorcerer, etc. What most people don’t know about Cade is that he is the current recipient of the blessing of Idamra, which grants him ‘extreme luck’. Not necessarily good or bad luck, just extreme luck. If one were to ask themselves “what are the chances?” and Cade is involved, the answer is actually “pretty good”. Cade is likely to discover ancient lost treasures and defeat powerful ancient evils completely on accident, and then convince others (and himself) that it’s just because he is so talented. (Think Othar Tryggvassen + Richard Moore/Kogoro Mouri + D’Artagnan = Cade Masters.) Likewise, Cade is also likely to bare an unhealthy resemblance to that assassination target or fugitive with the huge bounty on his head, drink the poisoned drink that was meant for some poor noble, and otherwise stumble into very deep ****.
Delbin Black (Will be in future pages): Assassin. Delbin is “blessed” by Morgana, the goddess of death and fate, forced to bare an existence that is halfway between life and undeath. He is able to merge with shadows to disappear and teleport. He is very dour, and what little sense of humor is does show is sarcastic and/or morbid. However, it is not his habit to mope or whine or otherwise wangst about his “life”. He approaches things with a very straightforward utilitarianism, and maintains a strong sense of discipline and focus in all that he does. He is supernaturally fast and nimble, and perhaps the most deadly swordsman in the world. Delbin takes a contract to kill Cade Masters, but through an unlikely series of events, he instead gets cursed so that whenever Cade is injured, so is Delbin (and vice versa). Now Delbin has to keep Cade Masters from getting himself killed before they can find a way to remove the curse.
Vadim Valntipur (Seen in the last panel of page 2, ordering Vodka): Dwarf Fighter. Vadim is a warrior from the country of Ustav. He wields a very large magical axe made for his clan's fighting style, in which his axe serves as both a weapon and a shield. Vadim is a loyal friend to Cade, though he seems to find great amusement in the predicaments he gets himself into.
Melchior (Seen in the last panel of page 2, pulling his hair out): Human Wizard. Melchior was assigned to follow and study Cade Masters as part of his professor's study on supernatural conditions that alter the fundamental laws of probability. Unfortunately, Melchior cannot stand Cade at all, though Cade seems oblvious to this fact. Melchior has very little patience, and tends to look down on those of low education.
Pella (one of the bounty hunters): Wood Sprite Arcane Archer. Pella has left her fey community to become a bounty hunter for unknown reasons. She is a very skilled arcane archer, and many enemies who have underestimated her due to her small size and 'cute' appearance have ended up on the wrong end of an exploding Imbued Arrow. Pella is feisty, honest, and easily excitable. She can also be stubborn and can be pissed off by trivial things. She blushes easily and brightly. Though Pella is no stranger to combat, Cade is her first target as a bounty hunter.
Skree (one of the bounty hunters): Kobold Ranger. Skree is a very cunning kobold and a veteran bounty hunter. His weapon of choice is the Arquebus, but he is also skilled with a variety of explosives. Skree is a cold-blooded killer, and puts the value of money above the value of any life but his own. He has been known to lower his rates slightly in exchange for highest-quality cigars and/or whiskey.
Brevis and Loqui (two of the bounty hunters): Brevis: Drow Executioner. Loqui: Drow Thief. Identical twin brothers, Brevis and Loqui have very little in common besides their appearance and their cockney accents. Loqui can never seem to shut up, and enjoys playing with his targets like a cat with a mouse. Brevis is very straightforward, talks little, and prefers not to waste time talking to his prey.
Rua: Human warlock/sorceress. Rua is "dark witch" who's master was burned at the stake recently, and is now haunted by her master's ghost, literally. After being saved by Delbin and Cade, she decides she should at least stick with them until she can return the favor.
No, thanks.
Look, everybody! A dead-tree-based Drawn Together!
No, thanks.
Uhm, how did you draw any parallel between this and Drawn Together?And how is a webcomic "dead tree based"?
Just... what?
Heh, I like how you have Bossk as one of the bounty hunters
What the? How did HE get in there?
Those Trandoshans are sly fellas...Art-wise it's okay. I like that you use different shots in panels, not just get talking heads all over the place.
No opinion on the writing yet.
Art-wise it's okay.
Just okay? What would you improve?
I like that you use different shots in panels, not just get talking heads all over the place.
Thanks!
No opinion on the writing yet.
Fair enough, not much to go on yet.
Art-wise it's okay.
Just okay? What would you improve?
The second page doesn't load for me, but the lack of background in the first one is kind of bad. And I would probably try a different angle as well, but that's just my personal opinion.
When it comes to characters, there is nothing really bad about them and not much I can say about improvement in that field.
Sorry for being vague.
This is very disappointing. It seems like the sole purpose of this comic is to exploit women and drag men further into the deep muck of sexual immorality. Men need to take a stand against this sort of content. It's time we manned up and didn't tolerate this sort of thing. Society says this is OK, yes. Does that make it right? No.
I assure you its not. In fact neither of the main female characters (when they are introduced) are particularly scantily clad or promiscuous.
There will be some busty females from time to time, just like in real life, and the character will react as their personality dictates. Cade is a stupid perv, and Mel is a little desperate. Vadim is more interested in his vodka. How would you expect them to react? Why does that bother you?
I'll be straight-up honest with you here, these are things that will be in the comic:
Men and women of all shapes, sizes, and personalities. There are women with small busts and large busts. Athletic men and women. Fat men and women. Just like in real life there are pervs who pay more attention to certain "shapes", but they are not the majority.
There will be violence. Awlym is a dangerous world, and some of the characters are more brutal than others.
There will be blood and gore. Not more than one would expect, but a realistic amount one would expect from being cleaved with a greatsword, etc.
There will be homosexual characters. Not a disproportionate amount, mind you. (I've noticed a trend where if a comic features GLBT characters, a lot of the time 90% of the world population is apparently bi and just didn't know it? Don't buy it, sorry.) Lesbians will not exist for the sole purpose of showing chicks making out with chicks, and you probably won't even find out the sexual orientation of any given character unless it is relevent to what's going on.
There will be (off screen) sex. (Most) of the characters are not chaste. However, I do not plan on showing their explicit bedroom activities. There will be some jokes about sex because sex is funny, and you'll probably seeing a fair amount of the before and the after.
If any of the above bothers you, then yes, this comic is not for you.
Rod of wonder, lol!
Well I for one like it.
Rod of wonder, lol!
Hah! Thanks!
Yeah, I noticed that 4e has been much more careful with its rod naming schemes than in previous editions. No more Rod of Wonder, Rod of the Python, Rod of Greater Enlarging, Rod of Widening, or Rod of Lesser Extending.
The art style is ok. It seems the dwarf is Russian, a nice break from so many people making them Scots or Irish. But I'm honestly not sold on the comic.
The Dwarf is "Ustavian," but yeah, basically Russian. Not all dwarves are from Ustav, though it is a popular country for them in Awlym.
If I may ask, what is it you are looking for in a webcomic that you are not seeing? Part of the reason I'm sharing this here is to get a feel for what can be improved as I tell the story.
I definitely prefer Russian dwarves to "Fantasy Standard".
Yeah, I never got the "fantasy standard" of making them sound like they are from Scotland. Russia or Scandinavia always seemed to make a lot more sense to me, if you are going to use a real-world culture.
If I may ask, what is it you are looking for in a webcomic that you are not seeing?
Therein is the thing. I'm not looking for anything. I follow a dozen webcomics right now, I'm not looking to start reading another. (And to be honest, there's a couple I keep meaning to look at, but I've yet to get around to them.)
I'll also say this: don't be discouraged if people don't warm up to the comic in the first handful of strips. I'm an avid follower of Goblins and Erfworld, both of which failed to hook me at first. But I poked back in on them a few months down the road and was pleasantly surprised at what they were shaping up to be.